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You lit the candle- I know you did!
And then you tumbled down the stairs.
Grabbed me from my wooden house, my silver friend waved goodbye.
Back up to your incensed room
‘Black Velvet’ read the tin foil case
You rolled me around in your hands, watching the flame
Dance through the rope.
You sat there for hours, biting your lip
As the candle burned through your sane.
What’s the hold up? YOU’VE DONE THIS BEFORE!
Are you scared? Do you remember the time they saw your hand?
You said it was a fall with Mr. Iron
Use that again!
Suddenly, I’m brought up to the ceiling, a quick breeze
Whips my eager face.
And you dipped me in the flame.
I go black
You start to tremble, and then, like that
I’m against your skin.
I love it when you do this; I love the feel of your fresh, nubile meat.
And then you pull me away, but my mark is already left.
I’ve branded you. You’ll pop those water domes, and they’ll scar.
In a maniacal frenzy, you throw me across the room. I hit the wall
With a ‘clang!’
You cry and cry in your little wooden chair- you scrutinize me.
And then again, I’m in your cupboard
Stashed against Lady Razor and Sir Matches
I feel so honoured, so special
I’ll see you tomorrow, sweetheart.
©2007-2009 ~DarK-MaidennE
:icondark-maidenne:

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I love the idea of having a poem from the viewpoint of cutlery. This seems very dark and fairly abstract. It's pretty hard to understand at first read but that's no bad thing, and it's definitely worthwhile to go over again. I interpreted it as being about self-harm, is this right?
:icondark-maidenne:
Thanks, I'm glad you like it ^^
Yeah, it is about self harm- burning to be precise.
:iconx-suicidal-beauty-x:
I had to read this twice before I understood it but after the second reading i thought it was beautiful. i love the way you have written it in the form of a spoon/knife/fork etc [=

Pretty Work.
xo

*Fave*

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HadoukenWhore.

OhYes.

HurtMe..I'mAlreadyBroken.

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:iconsworndestiny:
That's absolutely extraordinary, and an amazingly innovative interpretation of self-harm.

Great job!
Total :+fav:!

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no u

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:icondark-maidenne:
Thank you! ^^

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Every minute that goes by is a minute closer towards old-age, decay and death...
SO STOP READING THIS SIG AND WASTING TIME
:iconx-suicidal-beauty-x:
Hey.
i really hope you don't mind but i used a similar style of lit. for my english personification essay (A blade talking about self harm to a self injurer). But, then i felt bad because i remembered your poem. Only my english teacher will see it and im not publishing it anywhere at all.. mainly because it isn't that great and i feel bad enough anyway from thinking it was my own idea but then after id written it for your poem to remind me it wasn't.
i really hope you don't mind.
but, if you do please please say.

xox

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HadoukenWhore.

OhYes.

HurtMe..I'mAlreadyBroken.

x o x o
:icondark-maidenne:
I don't mind at all ^^
I'm sure it's still good, you should put it on dA sometime so I can see it.

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:iconx-suicidal-beauty-x:
Okay, I don't feel as guilty now that you have said you don't mind :)
*Sigh*

I might but it would probably go in scraps though.
If I do I'll tell you :)

xo

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HadoukenWhore.

OhYes.

HurtMe..I'mAlreadyBroken.

x o x o

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